Yours is good too. Just try to avoid clichés like car accident deaths or murders. Try to think of creative ways charcters would die like fires, alcohol intoxication, or electrocution.

Where can I read your writing?

Here at the bottom of the page: http://www.skyblock.net/threads/win-80-diamonds.103283/page-9

I have my own style of deaths. I'd rather keep it simple, then extreme, but when I write a detailed story, I can be brutal.

Just read it, good job vfhu. You should hav shown this off in your moderator application, impressive.