Thanks so much

Thanks for the advice I will now make the blue a tad darker

 

Well Done

 

I have also checked my spellings And they are all okay now
I have added some more on my why i should become a mod

 

Very good application; I'd give you about 35% support. I see potential I don't see you that often helping around or much seeing you online. It's not because of timezones as I also live in the UK. It's probably just when I'm logged off, but I do see you and as I have stated before, (not to be repetitive) I don't see you helping out that much.

Sorry if a bit harsh, It's just my opinion that you don't need to follow. It's there if you need it and that's what support is about.

(P.S Try and work on the times as I don't usually see you. )

 

I help a lot of players out daily from starting new island to answering questions, I don't really understand about working on my times, 6 and a half hours is a long time to be moderating, How can you not see me helping other players, And if that, I'm always speaking in chat unless I'm away from the keyboard, I understand slightly though, And i totally understand about your support, Thanks for the help And also apart from that is the Mod application good?

 

Enjoyed the application; I guess I was being a little hypocritical at the times as I don't see you. But I am sure I will and when I do, I will see how and when you help players

- x_P (.net player)

 

Hmmm... I see you in-game quite a lot. Your helpfulness throughout the server is questionable. I believe that this application lacks one thing. This application lacks why you stand out for what you believe in, how are you any different from the countless other applications?
Best of Luck!

 

I will take this information on board, I will start to edit my Application and then hopefully you can fully support me

 

I'm going to quote the application and show you where your errors are. I'm not going to provide feedback otherwise, at least, for now.

Key:
Red - Letters that need to be capitalized that aren't
Green - Letters that shouldn't be capitalized, yet are
Orange - Other, specified mistakes
Yellow - Unnecessary information
Purple - Things that should be redone entirely
Black Italics - My comments/explanations of the things I point out
_________________________________________________

Before anything, You guys reading need to know about me:
This sentence is poorly written. Purely an introduction tag would have sufficed.

In real life, my name is Liam.
I am a 13 year old minecrafter with a beautiful family and a lovely online life, Whenever i'm offline, i'm rather dancing or playing Black Ops III and Grand Theft Auto on my Xbox 1
I love to play games, Whenever i have the spare time i go on Youtube and watch my favorite youtubers. My favorite youtubers are Vanoss Gaming, H2O Delirious and PewDiePie
If you guys don't already know i eat food constantly xD The best biscuits in the world are obviously Oreos...
I am addicted to skim boarding and love watching Joogsquad do skin boarding, I would live to do it myself one day, I live in England, UK and i don't live near the sea what so ever :/ Which is a shame
This is a horrific run-on sentence. Also, it's stated elsewhere that you live in the UK. Mentioning it here isn't necessary.
Anyone can really get in touch with me I have Skype and team speak (Teamspeak doesn't have a space) , If you want to know my Skype then just try and get a hold of me whenever i'm in game, I respond to all my messages so i will reply to anyone who messages me, And before i forget i must mention, I will be on forums for a lot longer than i used to be,
Another run-on sentence that doesn't flow well.

Overall for this section:
The preface to your application should not take up 1/3-1/2 of the body of the entire application, and typically isn't a place for an in-depth "About me". We have an introduction section; I recommend that you write one and link it here instead of trying to fill out the page with this.
Your in-game name:
liamarchie - Although i like to be called Dead


Which timezone are you in?
I live in the UK, England
That is not a time zone. That is a location. 100% necessary fix.


Which languages do you speak?
I am very fluent in English, though at school i like to take French as a Option

Have you ever been banned? (if yes, why?)

I have been banned once by the "Ban Hammer"
I was just having a little bit of fun and got too over the top, A friend of mine was faking the system messages, and i thought it would be fun if i would do it as well, i got banned for 15 minutes.

^ Perfect example of horrid sentence structure. This desperately needs to be fixed.

Why do you think you should be a mod?

I think i should be come a Moderator because this server has been the first ever server i have expressed my feelings with, Most people on the server know me for the person i am
I love to help the newcomers that start out on their new island, I have had many people message me on how much good of a friend i am. I also tell people to stop spamming for that is something people should not do. If anybody does something wrong i will tell them.

The only sentences in this entire section that are actually relevant to your duties as a moderator are the last two (which I've underlined), and they're poorly written. Scrap this whole section and start over, as well as extend the length of it. This section should be the bulk of your application.


How long can you be active on the server every day?

These times will not always be the same, But i have thought about this very carefully. Omit this sentence. The times are the only necessary information here, and I would include a specification of things that pose a chance of prohibiting your activity. (Vacation, schoolwork, ect.)

Mon - 3:30 pm to 10:30 pm
Tue - 3:30 pm to 10:30 pm
Wed - 3:30 - 10:30
Thur - 3:30 pm -4:30 pm / 8:30 pm - 10:30 pm
Fri -3:30 pm - 5:30 pm / 8:30 pm - 2:00 am
Sat - 4:00 pm - 12:00 pm
Sun - 11:00 am - 10:00 pm


Do you have any past experience as a moderator?

None, But i wish to become a moderator on Skyblock.net
Instead of restating the obvious, use this space to justify why you believe you are capable despite lack of experience.

-=-=-=-=-=-=-=-


Thanks guys so much for reading this moderator application!
I hope you guys understand why i really want to become mod
Make sure you leave some positive feedback to me
Tell me what you guys think about me becoming a mod
Also, I understand if you can't make me a mod, I know there is (are) very few places.
And i hope you guys give me enough support to get me to Mod.

Sentences that are underlined should be removed as they aren't exactly the most appropriate to request. Sentences that are italicized should be re-written, since they could be stated much more effectively and in a way that is endearing.

Regards(,)
- Dead/ Liamarchie

Overall, the whole application consists of poorly-structured sentences that generally need work. I haven't highlighted all of them, purely because I would be highlighting about 95% of this application, if not more.
I see a pattern of the use of new lines or emoticons used in place of punctuation marks at the ends of sentences.
I also see a constant switch between words that use present and past tense. Consistency is important in this regard.
The increased font size and bold text (note that this alone made creating this post for you much more tedious) is most likely there to make this application appear larger. Instead of trying to make it appear larger, add more relevant information so you don't have to. I am fully willing to help you neaten up the appearance of your application, because the formatting is sloppily done.

I'm in class at the moment, so I'm short on time. I'll scroll through this one more time and see if there's anything I have yet to point out.

 

Neutral, work on your maturity

 

'No support'


100 support bb

 

50/50 Support.
-Active.
-You don't help a lot (/msg?). I usually see you talking in chat more and socializing.
-You're pretty mature.
Application-wise
-In my opinion, I think the text is a bit too big, but that doesn't affect it .
-You talk more about yourself than why you want to be a moderator. This isn't an introduction.
-Add more detail to why you want to be a moderator.
Good Luck, I will look out for you~

 

75% support. You need to try be ingame a bit more now. Other than that your a good guy, your very friendly and make everyone feel like their welcome. You also know how to help people out. So yes

Sent from my HTC Desire 620 using Tapatalk

 

-Good Spelling
-Less Colors bit too colorful or darken the colors
-Good Luck on your app

 

Bump maybe lock?

 

It's up to the thread owner. Moderator applications don't have to be locked if they're old.