Skyblock Wars: CryoControl(Akrill) Vs. PC1008831 #1

Skyblock Wars #1: CryoControl(Akrill) Vs. PC1008831
.ORG Super Mod Vs. EX .ORG Super Mod & Current .NET Super Mod

WARNING: Certain themes in this text may cause you to be uncomfortable. If you are not in every way an open person about Gore/Violence/Language/Sexual Themes than do NOT read this. I cannot stress you enough. (I must put this into spoiler just in case if someone was trying to leave and accidentally catches a glimpse of certain words in the text that they did not want to see. If you are certain you want to read Skyblock Wars, please click on the spoiler to check it out and read!) Thanks!

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pc1008831
Akrill

 

This is interesting

 

I don't know how to read :drowning

 

*Look at all the words big words* I Loved IT!

 

I thought pc would've won but I guess Akrill makes sense since he's a bad a**

 

It's decent, but rushed.

If you don't mind a tip, try describing the pair's emotions while they're fighting. Makes it immensely less ennui.

The grammar Nazi section of me is also dying to fix up the grammar.

Overall, very nice job, the dramatic fight could be visualized with ease.

 

I see your point and I would have loved to add it in greater detail but people are already complaining on how long it is.

 

Oh, I just realized you said something about grammar. Please tell me the parts of the grammar that is incorrect and i'll gladly fix it.

 

didnt read all of it. kurai caught longthreaditus

 

I suggested dis ​

 

You do know, that in any way, skill will overcome love. I'd just like to say, if this happened in real life, I wouldn't need a sword. I'd beat akrill up with a burrito.

 

smalll detail, Pc isn't smod LOL he should be doe

 

Just saying akrill : Don't look in your closet. I'm not there waiting with a sharpened knife, ready to jump out and rip you apart. I would never think of such a thing. Hah, that is not a painful enough death. I'd have to tie you down first, let the blood slowly run out till there is none left, and you are just a dried up pile of skin. I'll feed your internal organs to my dogs, and record them attacking your dead body, for the whole world to see
Don't take any of this seriously Akrill is a nub but I'd never do this to him unless he stole my breakfast

 

It's mostly just random commas that don't really matter. I wouldn't really worry about it

Example of something else:
"but Akrill dodged with skillful easiness." (skillful ease)

 

It was good, I enjoyed it

 

*It was terrible, it would of been great if pc had won, but the fact that he lost was so untrue, it made it suck*

 

TL;PDR (Too Long, Practically Didn't Read) was nice though.

 

You're not a Super Mod? People have been telling me you're not, but you feel like one! So i'm keeping that you are if you're not!

 

Akrill hacks

 

Yep that Aimbot